Published December 28, 2007
The Children
of Summer
Oh, it has been so long
Since I have seen them here.
What's a man to do
If he misses all his mates.
I remember back in the day
When we would go have fun.
At my home backyard
Where we would go out and play.
Ohhh..., we're children of the summer.
Ahhh..., we're the lords and kings of bummers.
(So what?) We are content with going under. (Life)
Ahhh....
If only I have one wish
I wish that they were here.
We'd waste our time within the sun
By playing out to sing
Old songs all forgotten in a whim
Rock songs all forgotten by the time
For a while,
I'll be content with this.
I'm remembering the days
When we would prank this place.
Just across the street
Where an old man lives
We would shout at his door
(There's a soldier here sir)
Then he would come out and say,
(I'm here Commander.)
Ohh..., we're children of the summer.
Ahhh..., we're the lords and kings of bummers.
(So what?) We are content with going under.
We are content with going under (Life)
If only I have one wish
I wish that they were here.
We'd waste our time within the sun
By playing out to sing
Old songs all forgotten in a whim
Rock songs all forgotten by the time
For a while,
I'll be content with this.
Hey Chris (Hey Chris)
I remember your line.
That we are pirates
So give us gold to make it better.
A rubber tire ( A rubber tire)
Some old wood plank (Some old wood plank)
And then we got in (We got in)
A ship made from our dreams
If only I have one wish
I wish that they were here.
We'd waste our time within the sun
By playing out to sing
Old songs all forgotten in a whim
Rock songs all forgotten by the time
For a while,
I'll be content with this.
(2x)
For a while,
I'll be content with this.
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I don't know if the "We are content with going under" works so well; it seems like too many sounds to say in relation with the previous lines; like you'd have to say this one really really fast and out of rhythm for it to fit. Similar with the second line above; maybe nix the "the" and replace the "and" with a comma? Then again, I don't know what kind of music this is set to. Knowing would be helpful. Otherwise? I love this chorus.
It's a nice song.
I liked this a lot, but i might change the "If only I had a wish" to "If only i had one wish" or something a little more definite and clarifying. It was just the tiniest bit confusing the first time i read it.
~abby~